Racial discrimination in America
Introduction
Body 1: The racial problem was serious in inchoate American society.
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2. Colored people hardly any dignity.
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2. Colored people hardly any dignity.
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Body 2: The struggle with racial discrimination
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2. Something about Martin Luther King
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2. Something about Martin Luther King
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Body 3: Nowadays, It has the great improvement about racial discrimination in American society.
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2. Whatever people’s color of skin, they always in with each other.
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2. Whatever people’s color of skin, they always in with each other.
Conclusion
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1 comment:
I know it will be a topic many of you will write about.
It seems you are going to introduce the situation of the black people in America, instead of racial discrimination to all other races, so narrow it down to the black first.
Next, are you going to focus more on historical background, or the present situation. In Body 1, it obviously is not about today, but history; and Body 2 about struggle against racial discrimination, you used two pictures both about Martin Luther King. He is definitely the most important figure, but there were more struggles, too, so even though you don't choose pictures, you have to introduce more than just Martin Luther King; Body 3 is the improvement in present American society, the picture is more like a promoting poster than a demonstration of real life situation.
All in all, you have too many pictures, that means you have to describe five pictures. I think the first two pictures have some details to describe, but not the other three. Remember you have to describe all the pictures in details.
My preference is more about present situation of discrimination to the black.
Leslie
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