Sep 16, 2008

Long overdue-Avish

" What to say in response"
Its quite interesting eassy, because of the examples given in. The thing in eassy i notice is author has describe his points and ideas, with the example. Author first gives the examples and then he starts explaining the point and ideas. Due to which readers gets the image of the points which he is going to make futher in eassy. Another thing is many time in the eassy author has used such words thats explain too much thing which author wants to say. Such few words express the whole image of the situation. For instance when author says about the women who is talking about Ben kingsley and in between she starts using irritating words for the Arabs people. At that time whatever author was feeling, She just express in few words that is "My blood froze". This gives the whole idea that author was feeling at that time.

2 comments:

Leslie said...

A good comment on the writer's writing style

This post is different from others in the aspect that it focuses more on the writer's writing strategies than on the ideas.

It's great that you noticed that the writer uses examples before making any comments or argumentation. And also the words of the article are densely composed but right on the target.

Though I can understand your meaning in the post, there are still too many language errors.
Let me do a re-editing:
It's quite a interesting essay with the vivid examples provided. What I noticed in the essay is his description to his points and ideas with examples. The author first gives the examples and then explain his points and ideas. Based on the example, he developes further. Another point is that for many times the author used very few words to express a rich meaning. Only a few words still depict a whole situation. ...

These are still your sentences, just a little polishing work.

Leslie said...
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