Nov 10, 2009

OUTLINE (SUHYUN HUH)

"THE Most Terrifying You'll Ever See"


THISIS
It seems obvious that human activity has made the earth a more convenient place for human habitation. there are many things that destory the environment. we have to stop threatening the environment and find out better way not threatening instead.


PURPOSE
To explain how the earth is getting worse and worse.People and government should stop destroying the earth.


TONE
strongly insist, explain, describe


STRUCTURE

A. Explain how much nature gives us many things


B. Explain how the earth is getting worth and worth

-what kind of things are destroying the environment

-How they destroy them.

-Describe my experience

-What is better way to protect the nature

-How are we going to protect it


Conclusion
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3 comments:

Leslie said...

1. Title: "The most Terrifying WHAT(?) You'll ever See"
2. Structure
B: Explain how the earth is getting WORSE and WORSE.
All the subparts are expressed in questions. Please give the details what they are, instead of using questions in outline.

And "what kind of things are destroying the environment" and "how they destroy them" could be put into the same part.

What is your experience? Explain.

"What is better way to protect the nature" and "How are we going to protect it" actually are same.

What is conclusion? Explain.

This outline is too brief.

November 10, 2009 at 11:13 PM
Leslie said...

hahaha!! I love your title..I want to know more... but ......ok..I am really intereted to read your paper. maybe you can go psycho way, like psycho kill people very cruel, cut them in piece when people alive. research why they have different thought from normal people. what are their childhood. I think it will be intereting~HAHA

Yen-Chieh Chen

November 11, 2009 at 1:19 AM
Anonymous said...

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November 15, 2009 at 8:40 PM

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